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Serena

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outtimes
« on: December 11, 2017, 06:44:01 PM »
and nothing happened
everyone enjoyed it
wanted to go home
uncomfortable things
or the tyre blowout
to make matters worse
it took him away
freeway collision
full panoply
fun as it was



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Re: outtimes
« Reply #1 on: December 16, 2017, 10:01:17 AM »
I like the concept of everyone enjoying the fact that nothing happened. It's amusingly unexpected and slightly bizarre.
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Re: outtimes
« Reply #2 on: December 17, 2017, 03:06:28 PM »
Thanks! That's my favourite part too, that and full panoply.

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Re: outtimes
« Reply #3 on: February 26, 2018, 08:16:35 PM »
I like the rhythm of this poem. It gives me the sense that we can only hear part of each line, while other parts are silenced and it is fun trying to piece it together.